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This thread is for comments about Pursued by a Bear, by Hannah Wolf Bowen.
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SarahP
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Reged: Mar 08 2004
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Loc: Iowa City, Iowa
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This story felt kind-of meandering, a little lost, and then wow, what an amazing, locking-into-place last paragraph. Terrific.
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Jules Noble
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I too found the story imprecise and I drifted away a bit. On re-reading I wondered if the story was not a bit mawkish or even fluffy, sentimental when hot sentiment or cold comment was needed.
Hower I liked the ending very much and thought the tale was worth telling. Perhaps the narrative style in the earlier part needs a bit of work to match the words and their message. Keep at it Hannah
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Holly
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I found the story to be somewhat repetitious, and the narrative was not tightly focused -- meandering is a good word for it. I assumed, however, that this was a deliberate choice on the part of the writer, to wander a bit as a reflection of what's going on internally with Joss, rather than amping up tension. For me, it didn't quite work, on the whole.
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JoanneMerriam
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Reged: Oct 07 2004
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Loc: Concord, NH
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I liked it (well, of course - I love bears). I did find the story somewhat meandering, but that didn't bother me.
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David Moles
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Reged: Jan 07 2004
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Loc: Basel, Switzerland
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Ladies and gentlemen, the story's already been written and published -- a little late for the workshop critique, isn't it?
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-- David
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Holly
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I thought the forum threads were a place to discuss reactions to the story, our impressions of it, and what we felt the writer was trying to accomplish, and how it worked for us as readers? I've never posted before; I just worked up my courage to do so today. :) If I've misunderstood the purpose of the forum or offended anyone, I apologize.
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Anonymous
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I tend to think my job at this point is to shut up and let the story stand on its own merits. Just wanted to say thanks to those who read it, and I appreciate the thoughts.
- Hannah
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Anonymous
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I tend to think my job at this point is to shut up and let the story stand on its own merits.
- Hannah
And it does! I just got around to reading it earlier and was letting the thoughts do their thing. I'll say more later, but for now: I liked it a lot, and was moved.
That's all that matters, really. :)
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George Potter
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I tend to think my job at this point is to shut up and let the story stand on its own merits.
- Hannah
And it does! I just got around to reading it earlier and was letting the thoughts do their thing. I'll say more later, but for now: I liked it a lot, and was moved.
That's all that matters, really. :)
Me above.
I found the story to be beautifully told in a quiet, low key manner. This impresses me since I have trouble with that sort of tone. Rather than meandering, I felt the author took her time to explore the characters reactions in a complex and nuanced way. The dream sequences were properly odd and struck me as realistic. The characters were sympathetic and well fleshed out, and the story as a whole had an emotional kick that snuck up on me in a good way.
Excellent job. Thank you.
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"For any speculation which does not at first glance look crazy, there is no hope." - Freeman Dyson
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