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This thread is for comments about Homestay, by Tim Jones.
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bagoink
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Reged: Jan 27 2005
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Lest anyone think I'm a crank or something, based on the Coffee Cup/Alien Invasion thread, I just want to say that I like this story.
It's told in a clear language that guides the reader through it from beginning to end. I like the way it hides certain details throughout the story - it doesn't give the reader everything rght away, but it plays fair. It doesn't cheat itself or the reader. Bits like "To feel hunger was interesting" held my attention.
This isn't to say that it's perfect: The line "It was our law that only one instance of each consciousness could exist in our polity" is a classic example of exposition that should be avoided. The line could be removed altogether to allow the statement "But then you—this you—can never return" to stand on its own, or if the detail about the law is required, it could be altered into an example of only one consciousness being allowed. The parenthetical explanation was a major flaw, a sticking point, a red light for me.
But, overall, a fun read that I found original and well-written. Thanks!
Drew
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all the same writing a story makes you sweat even in winter also Im afraid because the lamp has gone out and as the man said my thumb akes
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Anonymous
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I liked it too, for the freshness of the concept.
I get bored with stories that focus on characters. What's new? People are people, and while it's interesting enough to read about them and their growth or lack of it, that's a dull focus for SF/F.
With SF, I want new, inventive, something I hadn't thought of -- or couldn't have thought of.
Homestay did that for me.
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